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Naivety by ~Amat3il:iconAmat3il:

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If we weren't so naïve maybe we would have fires dancing in our eyes instead of candlewicks, perhaps we would have tabletops spinning on our hands instead of paper plates and maybe we'd have oceans in our laps instead of rock pools
[if we could just see past the tips of our noses]

If we weren't so blind perhaps we'd walk on the emerald roads instead of the amber, perhaps we would jump over mud puddles instead of walking through them, and maybe we'd wear furs instead of rags and hold out our hands to help the wounded that line the streets
[if we could just take off our blindfolds and open our eyes]

If we weren't so deaf perhaps we'd hear the whistling of time going by instead of a muffled whisper, maybe we'd hear the screams of our dreams as they die, one by one, and maybe we'd hear the rain hitting the ground before we walked out into it, to save ourselves getting rained upon
[if we could just take away the cotton wool and unstop our ears]

If we weren't so mute perhaps we could warn others of the danger they walked into before they lay wounded upon the grass, perhaps we could murmur a thanks to an equally silent friend, and maybe we'd be able to speak up in defence of the innocent
[if we could just take off the gag and loosen our tongues]

If we weren't so self-absorbed perhaps we'd stop and give bread to the hungry, perhaps we'd stop and help a man to his feet, and maybe we'd be able to dance with others instead of alone and share what we have with those who don't
[if we could just open our hearts and give a little piece away]
©2009-2010 ~Amat3il
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~Confusion-System Dec 2, 2009, 7:53:50 AM
After a heavy night with the guys at soccer, I came home and couldnt move a part of my body as I just sat on my chair tired and almost too weak to bare the gravity.

Then I noticed my PC was on and decided to hit my firefox's bookmarks. It lead me to your page and to this piece, I couldnt feel my body afterward.

PLEEASE become a writer in the age of my children, so they can grow up with you arts!


-CS

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~Amat3il Dec 4, 2009, 2:14:14 AM
Thankyou...But if you had been reading my journals you would know I no longer submit any work.

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Listen close as the rain falls down to the ground

It's true, we are
we are destined to fail
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~Confusion-System Dec 4, 2009, 3:08:12 AM
Its too bad I hope your flame for writing reignites sometime very soon in the future and you may once again bless and delight many users with your words once more, it isnt the question of your writing being a "lie" it is just that it brings delight to those who reads them, like I certainly was and it creates fulfillment. Your an awesome writer. Return soon!



-CS

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=miss-tempest Nov 2, 2009, 4:05:56 PM
:rose: You've been featured here: [link]

MissTempest xox

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~I take commissions! Visit MissTempest on renderosity.com for more of my artwork~
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~Amat3il Nov 9, 2009, 4:45:56 PM
Thank you :)

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Listen close as the rain falls down to the ground

It's true, we are
we are destined to fail
:iconmiss-tempest:
=miss-tempest Nov 9, 2009, 4:49:18 PM
:D

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~I take commissions! Visit MissTempest on renderosity.com for more of my artwork~
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~Non-Thinker Nov 1, 2009, 3:39:13 AM
I love the very last line
[if we could just open our hearts and give a little piece away]
:)

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~The One That Does Not Think
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~Amat3il Nov 1, 2009, 3:54:48 AM
:) i liked it

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Listen close as the rain falls down to the ground

It's true, we are
we are destined to fail
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~coldfalafel Nov 1, 2009, 3:38:09 AM
this is nice.

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If you don't eat your meat you can't have any pudding! How can you have pudding if you don't eat your meat!? Another Brick in the Wall- Pink Floyd
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~Amat3il Nov 1, 2009, 3:54:35 AM
Thankyou

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Listen close as the rain falls down to the ground

It's true, we are
we are destined to fail
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